One Day to Live - What do you think?

Wow. That made me pretty sad. It's pretty good, but I don't think it focuses enough on how to actually spend one's last day...unless that's not the point you were trying to make? I think you could extend it a little. Also, it feels somewhat unifinished. It rhymes very well, and the use of vocabulary is excellent, but it is repetitive. You should add more details, as opposed to only rephrasing previous ones. I like the idea for the poem, though. It's fascinating, and you can make it very powerful, if you polish it a little bit.